Black Ghost

This was good. I enjoyed it, and it seemed to flow really well. But I do have once concern about the plot. On some days when I was really depressed ...

Yeah, I agree, don't give up on it. Criticism shouldn't cause you to give up. And if you're better at comedic pieces, turn it into one, like Imp said. If ...

Hey, kitty15. :D I'd like to say first that although you have a pretty cool concept for a murder mystery, this piece needs some work. There are punctation errors, and ...

‘Just a little prick, and it’ll all be over, Mr. Prawda’ ‘Yes, I’m sure of it. After Schiavo, there’s definite precedent. And really, isn’t it for the best?’ First of ...

What's the difference? If someone really wanted to plagiarize that badly, they could make an account here very easily, and it wouldn't take them much time.

The Harry Potter series. Surprising?

Used sparingly, death threats can be quite effective. Tracy knew that for sure. She'd seen it lots of times, especially in horror movies. Just throw out a death threat, and ...

In other words it's very bad for a story. :(

Hi again, this was a good second chapter, :D although it was a bit confusing. :lol: I think you're greatest strength is dialogue, because it flows really well when I ...

Eating him? No, that wasn't what I wasn't going for. I woudn't want to to be that morbid. The ending was supposed to imply that they were getting rid of ...

9/10 that was pretty hilarious

This makes me sick to my stomach. I will seriously have second thoughts next time I go on a roller coaster. :?

That is insanely ironic. :shock:

Nicely done. Like Adam said, there isn't much to crit, but I still have a few comments. :D Her shirt didn’t go low, and wasn’t very tight she wore a ...

When I first started I would run and show my parents every little thing I would jot down...even though it was absolute crap. And now when I'm capable of writing ...